Name : Mirna Wati
SRN : 1401120951
Subject : writing II
Lecturer : M. Zaini Miftah, M.Pd
CINCALU
One of the foods in Central Kalimantan is Cincalu.
Cincalu is typical food, especially the Dayak, Dayak Saruyan coast. It is a food made of fermented small shrimp mixed with salt as a natural preservative that is the goal that is not rotten and wormy and food was customarily often found in the area Seruyan kuala pembung precisely in the district.
Cincalu is typical food, especially the Dayak, Dayak Saruyan coast. It is a food made of fermented small shrimp mixed with salt as a natural preservative that is the goal that is not rotten and wormy and food was customarily often found in the area Seruyan kuala pembung precisely in the district.
Cincalu also has interesting characteristics.
Namely in terms of taste is very tasty, savory, soft, and also very fragrant
aroma typical salty and sour mix that makes eaters addicted to enjoyed and also to
buy it.
Cincalu also sold by way weighed. Cinncalu
typically sized for a 180 milliliter bottle sells for Rp. 15,000 and it depends
who had mixed rice porridge or rice porridge that has not been interfered with,
if that has been mixed with rice porridge price may be slightly more expensive.
In conclusion, that cancalu is eating a delicious, simple and cheap although
depending on the type cancalunya, and even then not too expensive and juaga
cancalu is a typical food Dayak, Dayak especially coastal Seruyan that must be
preserved in order not to become extinct.
mirna i think your writing have good but it essay because there are 3 paragraph there. and there is no strange word.
BalasHapusI suggest you to edit your paragraph in justify, it is better than before. Then , you must give underline to your topic sentence. I think , your paragraph too much and Mr. Zain said (that)"He asked us to make a paragraph". In supporting sentence , I suggest you to use transition signals in your paragraph. Transition signals are words and phrases that connect the idea in one sentence with the idea in another sentence. They are expressions such as first/second, furthermore, on the other hand, for example, and in conlusion. If you using transition signals you can makes your paragraph smoother and hepls your reader understand it more easily.
BalasHapusThe last sentence or concluding sentence, brings the paragraph to a logical conclusion. The concluding sentence states the main point again or summaries the main idea of the paragraph. In addition, it can a suggestion, an opinion, or an prediction. Sometimes we use end of paragraph signals as follows : in conclusion, in summary, in brief, to conclude, etc. A good paragraph should have coherence. It is can to helps the reader understand the paragraph. Once again, don't forget to add strange words in your task.
Please make your conclusion be shorter, but it it conclude the topic and easy to understand. :)
BalasHapus